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=2/6/10= =Description= =The swooping eagle drops down towards the grey misty water. His fiery eyes are looking around looking for something, his big claws ready to catch something. He glides around with his huge brownish finger like wings stretching out like an albatross soaring along. His pure white long neck turning into a bright yellow face with all the contrast of his black fiery eyes and his black curved beak. The rough bottom half of his body is like brownish sand paper, and his curved legs look like they are so wrinkled and so rough that they could break like a twig. But with all the contrast it goes together beautifully.=

= = = = =My Autumn Poem= == =self assessment=

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30 Minute Writing Sample character writing-a family member

first paragraph: description second paragraph: personality hobbies/work

My Dad My dad looks like he’s in his fifty’s when he is 62 turning 63 later this year. He is about maybe 6.5 with brown thinning hair he is not bald, he also has a brown thick mustache, wears sort of big glasses, he is a little over weight but not very much, normally wears long pants and a short sleeve T-shirt

My dad is always very friendly, he is very bubbly he sometimes makes jokes and their normally funny. My dad is a saddler so he makes and fixes a lot of things. He is also the president of the W.W.R.C.

The End

Your dad sounds like an interesting man. Something simple you could do to make your writing easier to read, is to check for full stops - you have some quite long sentences in here. It’s a good idea to finish the writing off with something like ‘and he’s the best dad in the world’...

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W.A.L.T: describe our selves in a poem
= Amaliaca =



description:
== He looks like a ugly green monster with one big yellow eye, big teeth, no nose, two big green ears, and he has got flaming wings tattooed on his stomach, he is about the size of a normal 15 year old boy but he is all ways fat. He smells like he needs a bath. He feels scaly and rough. He sound like shriek. And he tastes like chocolate if cooked properly. ==